Friday, 22 March 2013
Tuesday, 12 March 2013
Thriller - First Draft Review
I've found that my thriller opening was far too short and it really needed more scenes. Perhaps a scene after the one I filmed as it is far too short. Also, from the feedback I have received I know that I need to change the title from 'The Thieving Raven' as it sounds more like the title of a TV drama. I am thinking about simplifying the narrative as it is very complex at the moment and I feel it has become too much in terms of location and script.
I also need to change the titles to simpler ones as it doesn't look as good with them large upon the screen.
The dialogue also needs to be changed as I feel it sounds a little forced and less natural than I want it to sound. I may change it to something shorter and have very little dialogue within it and focus more on an emotional response from the audience rather than a complex plot at the beginning as I need to keep the audience engaged but I can't reveal too much as questions cannot all be answered within the first few minutes.
I also need to change the titles to simpler ones as it doesn't look as good with them large upon the screen.
The dialogue also needs to be changed as I feel it sounds a little forced and less natural than I want it to sound. I may change it to something shorter and have very little dialogue within it and focus more on an emotional response from the audience rather than a complex plot at the beginning as I need to keep the audience engaged but I can't reveal too much as questions cannot all be answered within the first few minutes.
Friday, 8 March 2013
Thriller - Editing Cont.
I have faced several difficulties whilst editing, such as handling the new software, and cutting down the clips and with my first draft, it is only a minute long, and I did not reach the two minute target. I also think, even though the piece is a draft, is that it is very, very sketchy and raw, but hopefully I can fix this to the best of my ability. I will mostly likely have to broaden the story more and film more shots to reach the two minutes. Things will also have to be reshot in the time that I have after the first draft.
I really need to improve it as I feel that it is not as good as it could be.
I really need to improve it as I feel that it is not as good as it could be.
Monday, 4 March 2013
Thriller - Filming Difficulties
1) Fake blood
In the scene with actors, during the speech between the Widow and Sebastian Delorio, Sebastian needs fake blood on his brow, to look like he has just been injured. But, due to not being able to find fake blood or acquire it, it will not be appearing within the thriller. I do think that Sebastian looking tired and lethargic is enough to get the message across that he has been in a hurry. Hopefully, Sam will be able to portray this, as an actor.
2) The Widow
Because of the due date of the thriller being so close and I only arranged filming with Sam so far, as because of my time in the Lake District the dates were pushed back, he will play the physical part of the Widow, as I now plan for only the hand and the upper arm to be shown along with the prop of the pistol. I will get Phoenix to do a narration, both for the lines of the Widow and for the Narrator, putting on a different accent for the Narrator, which I know she is capable of doing. I will need to arrange a time to do the narration with her one lunchtime.
3) The music
I also need to complete the score for the thriller, which will be nothing more than a few notes upon my keyboard at home. I will film myself playing it, making sure it does not last longer than two minutes, as to not go past the time limit. Failing that, I will need to get some free music from a website. I also need to get a gunshot sound effect for the thriller.
4) The title
The title of the thriller would be called the Theiing Magpie, after the Rossini overture which I would coer in my thriller on my piano. I now know that that is not possible to coer because of copyright reasons and also, it has been hard to get footage of magpies. However, on a trip to Elaston Castle, there were many ravens around that I could get some really good and up close footage of. So, the title will hae to be changed from 'The Theiing Magpie' to 'The Thieving Raen'. I chose this title because someone has stolen something from the Widow, which she wants back.
In the scene with actors, during the speech between the Widow and Sebastian Delorio, Sebastian needs fake blood on his brow, to look like he has just been injured. But, due to not being able to find fake blood or acquire it, it will not be appearing within the thriller. I do think that Sebastian looking tired and lethargic is enough to get the message across that he has been in a hurry. Hopefully, Sam will be able to portray this, as an actor.
2) The Widow
Because of the due date of the thriller being so close and I only arranged filming with Sam so far, as because of my time in the Lake District the dates were pushed back, he will play the physical part of the Widow, as I now plan for only the hand and the upper arm to be shown along with the prop of the pistol. I will get Phoenix to do a narration, both for the lines of the Widow and for the Narrator, putting on a different accent for the Narrator, which I know she is capable of doing. I will need to arrange a time to do the narration with her one lunchtime.
3) The music
I also need to complete the score for the thriller, which will be nothing more than a few notes upon my keyboard at home. I will film myself playing it, making sure it does not last longer than two minutes, as to not go past the time limit. Failing that, I will need to get some free music from a website. I also need to get a gunshot sound effect for the thriller.
4) The title
The title of the thriller would be called the Theiing Magpie, after the Rossini overture which I would coer in my thriller on my piano. I now know that that is not possible to coer because of copyright reasons and also, it has been hard to get footage of magpies. However, on a trip to Elaston Castle, there were many ravens around that I could get some really good and up close footage of. So, the title will hae to be changed from 'The Theiing Magpie' to 'The Thieving Raen'. I chose this title because someone has stolen something from the Widow, which she wants back.
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