I've found that my thriller opening was far too short and it really needed more scenes. Perhaps a scene after the one I filmed as it is far too short. Also, from the feedback I have received I know that I need to change the title from 'The Thieving Raven' as it sounds more like the title of a TV drama. I am thinking about simplifying the narrative as it is very complex at the moment and I feel it has become too much in terms of location and script.
I also need to change the titles to simpler ones as it doesn't look as good with them large upon the screen.
The dialogue also needs to be changed as I feel it sounds a little forced and less natural than I want it to sound. I may change it to something shorter and have very little dialogue within it and focus more on an emotional response from the audience rather than a complex plot at the beginning as I need to keep the audience engaged but I can't reveal too much as questions cannot all be answered within the first few minutes.
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